Friday, 11 May 2012

Taniela - Swimming Lessons writing

on monday we went to the swimming pools Room 15 had to get change into their swimming clothes. As the other classes were swimming we had to have a rinse in the shower before we get in the pool. Then we had to stand in a line. After that we were waiting for the other classes to get out

The instructor said who knows how to get in safely when you get in the pool then semi raised his hand and said he knows how to get in safely as we where in the pool we had to backstroke all the way to the end of the island. i was swimming fast my legs where tiering bobbing my head down and up. waves rippling on the surface

Then the last thing we did was breathing competition then Texas won

1 comment:

Mr Marks said...

Well done Taniela, great work producing such a big piece of writing. This is your best piece this year. Nice one.

I really like that you have used a variety of sentence beginnings. It's nice to see you thinking about it and including it.

The only thing you need to think about is using capital letters to begin sentences and for peoples or places names.

Great work Taniela.

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